외국어 어떤 문장이 더 자연스러워??영어얌

I read books in high school just to improve my writing skills 아니면 I have been reading book since i was a high school student for improve my writing skills

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솔직하게 말하면 둘다 초큼 어색해용....
작문 실력을 향상하기 위해 고등학생때부터 책을 읽었다는걸 말하고 싶은거야?

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엉 근데 지금은 취미가 되었다라고 말하고싶은데ㅠㅠ저 문장도 어색하면 나머지 글도 다 어색하려나ㅠㅠㅠ

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일단 난 영어 문법을 따로 공부한적은 없어서 왜 이상한지 문법적으로는 이야기 못해줄꺼같아ㅠㅠ 그래도 6살때부터 캐나다 살았으니까...!
1. I read books in high school just to improve my writing skills
얘는 just를 굳이 넣을필요는 없을꺼같아 왜냐면 작문 실력을 향상시키기 위해서라는 목적을 너무 강조하는 느낌이야
처음에는 작문 실력을 위해서 읽었지만 지금은 취미가 됐다고 이야기하고 싶은거면
I started reading books in high school to improve my writing skills, but I enjoy reading now. 이런식으로 이야기하는게 자연스러울꺼같아
2. I have been reading book since i was a high school student for improve my writing skills
얘는 일단 for 대신 to 를 쓰는게 맞고 book 대신 books를 써야돼
그리고 since high school ~~~~ to improve my writing skills라 하면 지금은 취미다라는 의미가 제대로 드러나지 않을꺼같아
난 1번을 쓰는걸 추천해!
나머지 글이 어색할지는 모르겠네ㅠㅠ 그래도 많이 이상한건 아니니까 괜찮지 않을까..?

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세상에..나 이거 되게 중요한 과제인데 완전 엉망으로했구나ㅠㅠㅠ이렇게 자세히 알려주다니 완전 고마워ㅠㅠ다른 것도 물어보고싶은데 너무 길어서 민폐일 것 같아 이거 한문장 수정도 진짜 너무 고마워

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아냐아냐 물어봐도 돼... 자가격리중이라 할꺼없어ㅠㅠ

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문단이 4개 정도되는데 하나에 6줄 정도 되는데 진짜 괜찮을까..?

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웅웅 괜찮아

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음음 이거 주제가 4가지고 그거에 대해서 각각 대답하는거야 아니면 하나의 글로 완성시켜야되는거야?? 이거에 따라서 좀 달라질꺼같아성

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아 오키오키
일단 주제가 자유시간에 뭐하냐는거자나 근데 너가 독서하는걸 좋아해요! 라고 말하고 싶은거면 첫 문장에서 first가 안나오는게 좋을꺼같아. first가 나오면 second/next 등등 독서 말고 좋아하는거 하나가 더 나와야되는데 쓰니 글은 독서에 대해서만 이야기하는같아서
First i like reading a book of the kind of fiction.
일단 like는 제시문에 있으니까 유의어인 enjoy를 쓰는게 좋을거같아
I enjoy reading books가 되겠지?
근데 쓰니가 소설?을 좋아하는거 같으니까 fictional stories 아니면 novel이 좋을꺼같아. 근데 책이 좋은거니까 novel이 조금 더 적절할거같아 왜냐면 fiction은 허구의 창작물 전체를 뜻하거든
이걸 다 종합하면 I enjoy reading novels in my free time. 요렇게 바꿀수있을거같오

I read one book a week in my room before i go to bed at night.
이 문장은 1주일에 1권을 읽고, 자기 전 방에서 읽는다 이뜻인거 같은데
a book per week랑 in bed라는 표현을 쓰면 자연스러운 글이 될꺼같아
I usually read books in bed, and I try to finish a book per week.

I started reading books in high school to improve my writing skills, but i enjoy reading now. 다시보니까 고칠게있네...
I started to read books regularly in high school to improve my writing skills, but reading has became my hobby throughout the years.

The book i am reading this week is George Orwell’s book called Animal Farm.
책을 이야기할때는 Animal Farm by George Orwell 순으로 보통 이야기해
This week, I am reading Animal Farm by George Orwell. 이렇게!

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I booked our round trip airplane ticket on the internet and got my money exchanged before our journey so that we don't have to find the money exchange at the airport.

We chose economy class seats because my flight from Korea to Japan was short for 1 hour and 30 minutes.
1.5시간의 짧은 비행이어서 이코노미 좌석을 예약했다라는거니까
Since it was only an hour and a half flight to Japan, we decided to go for economy class seats. 라고 쓰는게 자연스러울꺼같고

I took a small carry on bag and a checked bag to the airport.
캐리온 하나랑 수화물 하나를 가져갔다는거 같은데 아닌가...? 일단 이 뜻이 맞으면
I took two bags with me: one carry-on and one checked baggage. 가 맞을꺼같앙

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The flight attendant helped me lift my carry on bag on board.
기내에 들고가는건 당연히 carry-on이니까 그냥 가방이라 써도 될꺼같아 기내 선반?은 overhead bin/compartment야!
The flight attendant helped me store my luggage in the overhead bin.

We got off the plane, found our luggage at the baggage claim so I met guide in the arrivals area of the airport.
일단 착륙후는 after landing이라는 표현을 자주 쓰고 수화물 찾는 곳은baggage claim area라고 자주 써
After landing, we found our suitcase at the baggage claim area and met our tour guide at the arrival area.

The trip was the best experience because I was able to get enough relax and I made a reservation and planned without anyone's help.
best experience를 앞에서 썼으니까 그냥 this trip was the best라고 안겹치게 써도 될꺼같아 get enough 다음에는 relax대신 rest가 나와야돼! 왠지는 모르겠넹....
This trip was the best because I was able to get enough rest, and because I was able to plan my trip and make reservations without anyone's help.

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I would like to recommend the place where I stayed for a day with my friends when I went to Jeju Island last winter.
Although it was not a luxury and fancy hotel, it was a hotel with a unique atmosphere and a budget hotel.
luxury는 보통 사치품을 말하는거고 럭셔리하다라는걸 표현하고싶으면 luxurious를 써야해!
Although it was not a luxurious and fancy hotel, it had a unique atmosphere and was on budget.

There’s a traditional bed and breakfast out in the countryside near 애월.
formal writing에서는 줄이는거 거의 안써 there's 대신 there is!
There is a traditional bed and breakfast in the neighbourhood where 애월 is located.

There are only small houses nearby so i can see the stars well because there are no High rise.
별이 많이 보인다는걸 꾸며주면 좋을꺼같아서 조금 추가해봤오
I could enjoy the beautiful night sky full of stars because only small houses are nearby and no high buildings are present.

Of course, there was no front desk, no bell boy and room service.
no 가 두번 안나와도 돼!
Since 애월 is a small accomodation, there is no front desk, bell boy, and room service.

Check-in was possible by simple message, with two rooms and a twin room.
소개하는거니까 과거형보다는 현재형을 쓰는게 좋을꺼같아 two room/twin room은 뭘 말하는지 모르겠어ㅠㅠ
Check-in is quick and easy - only a message is required to gain access to your room.

There was a minibar in the kitchen and a spa was perfect.
The minibar in the kitchen and the perfect spa adds to the quality of 애월.

It’s a detached house, so you can heal quietly and comfortably.
독채라는건가...?
애월 is consisted of private houses, so you can relax quietly and comfortably.

I recommend this if you want a place to rest in peace and quiet.
strongly를 추가하면 더 좋을꺼같오
I strongly recommend 애월 if you are looking for a place to take rest.

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My neighborhood is oo-dong. I live in a safe suburban neighborhood.
이거 두개를 I live in 00dong, which is a safe suburban neighborhood. 이라 합치는게 자연스러울꺼같아

It is a revolutionary neighborhood where many young people live.
이게 무슨 뜻인지는 모르겠는데 활기가 넘친다는건가...?
00-dong is a lively neighborhood with a lot of young people.

I live in a 15-story apartment. 이 문장이 조금 짧은거같은데 뒤에 뭘 추가했으면 좋겠어
예를 들면 I live in a 15-story apartment, so I can see people passing by from my room. 이런식으로!

I can see many middle and elementary schools while walking around my neighborhood.
이건 elementary->middle 순으로 쓰는게 자연스렁ㄹ거같옹

There are many educational facilities nearby. So it's a little crowded.
이거 두 문장은 합치는게 좋을꺼같아..!
There are many educational facilities nearby, so it is a bit crowded.

There are quite a few business searches, including cafes, grocery stores and restaurants.
quite a lot이 엄청 자주 쓰는 표현이야! business searches 가 뭘 말하는지 모르겠어ㅠㅠ
There are quite a lot of business searches, including cafes, grocery stores, and restaurants in 00-dong.

There is also a public space nearby where you can rest.
이건 그대로 가도 될꺼같오

There are so many amenities around my neighborhood that I don't have to walk far. I'm happy to live here!
amenities보다는 facilities가 더 좋을꺼같아!
There are so many facilities around my neighborhood so I don't have to walk too far. I'm happy to live here!

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진짜 너무 고마워서 보답하고싶어ㅠㅠ거의 새로 적어준거나 다름없어가지구 물어볼 곳이 없어서 너무 한번에 많이 물어본 것 같기도해ㅠ한문장씩 다 수정해줘서 너무 고마워 혹시 실례가 안된다면 가끔 질문해도 괜찮을까? 이런 과제를 하나 더 하고 있는데 일주일째 잡고 있어서 물론 거절해도 진짜 괜찮아 오늘도 너무 도움을 많이 받았어 시간도 많이 늦었는데 진짜 고마워 익이니 보고 영어공부에 동기가 되었다고 해야하나 아무튼 진심으로 고마워

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응응 괜찮아!! 시간도 늦었는데 잘자구!!!

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익이나 염치없지만 시간이 괜찮다면 오늘도 부탁해도 될까??